5 Big, Yet Awful, Essay Mistakes
College Essay/Activities Workshop
Did you hear about the Long Island kid who had a 30M business, a straight A average and 34 on his ACT...
...But failed to get into 80% of his colleges?
That was a head scratcher for a lot of folks. I me-self was slightly curious.
Then I saw his essay.
(He posted it on X/Twitter, it wasn't buried like the Epstein files.)
Before I tell you what I think about the essay, permit me to make a few comments:
It's never ONE THING that gets a kid into, or keeps him out of, his top choice colleges.
Second, the essay is important, but perhaps not as critical as you might think. My best guess is that it accounts for about 10, maybe 15% tops, of the application.
It's just that that 10% becomes more important if your kid is one of the on-the-fence applicants.
Now, brace yourself for my professional, insightful analysis of this kid's essay:
SUCKY.
Really, it was SO BAD.
Pretentious, lacking insight and, sadly, obviously co-authored (best case scenario) by my man Artie.
Artie Fischal Intelligence, that is.
I call him Artie, but you know him better as ChatGPT.
I felt bad ripping it apart the last time I presented on this topic, but, then again, the kid posted it on X for the world to see.
Tonight, I'm running the same class one final time. and I'll be using this essay as a case study, as well as spending time on the most popularly asked supplemental essay topics.
At the workshop, you will also discover extracurricular activity tips and traps, and other related topics.
The session is tonight at 6:30pm EST, and it's free.
Hustle over her to sign up:
See you tonight!
-Andy "Merciless, But Fair" Lockwood
P.S. Please share this with anyone who won't get this information from their English teacher or anywhere else (e.g. friends, family, Facebook friends, the guy at the deli, whomever).